Yesterday I had a Google Hangout with my tutor Clare Wilson. It was an experience I feel should be carried out more frequently throughout the courses – As it can certainly build a better rappor with the OCA Team and help build up confidence in your work, or give quick guiding help to those who need it.
I was pleased that my tutor confirmed that I was making good progress – this is a copy of her report with my comments added:
It was good to talk to you today via google hangout. I have given you a summary of the
main feedback points.
Feedback on assignment
Demonstration of technical and Visual Skills, Quality of Outcome, Demonstration of
Confident, fluid studies in a range of media. The quicker ones work best.
Pencil studies – sensitive and well balanced compositionally. Tonal perspective well
rendered. confident, fluid marks.
Pen – we careful to avoid making severe contrasts as these can look a little contrived.
Developing your studies
Engaging, well considered composition – the strongest is the pencil drawing (good
combination of decisive linear detail and softer sense of movement).
Foreground, middle ground, background.
Interesting to see the development of your ideas – the first study is delicately rendered
in terms of the mark making and slightly animated line. I can understand your
frustrations in terms of perspective but in correcting this, the second and third attempts
lose some of the quality of line and are overworked in comparison.
You are resolving this in the final watercolour study. Here you are achieving depth
while also allowing the medium to inform the results without overworking.
This is developed further with your ariel perspective piece of a similar scene. The
indian ink piece is beautiful and the watercolour has luminosity and the right amount of
I feel confident using both indian ink and watercolour, in addition to charcoal – there is a need to take this strength further and push myself to the limits using these mediums. I was pleased that my tutor recognised a continued improvement in my mark making and confident use of different media.
Quick sketches have energy. Final piece quite well executed though the central placing
of the sign lets composition down a little – though it’s shadow does work well. Placing it
further to one side might have created more effective balance while retaining sense of
Townscape using line
Again, an energetic use of mark making. Particularly like the square/tower block pencil
Charcoal and soft pencil study of moving figures is well executed with sense of
movement. There are inaccuracies – the arms of the figures don’t quiet look in
proportion but overall it still works because of the way you have suggested movement.
I enjoyed working on these pieces and was pleased with the comments made. I wish to take the movement of people in the towncentre further in Part 4.
Limited palette study
Good tonal range and some delicate linear detail. Becoming overworked in places –
lower section is a little heavy. Works better where you use the edge of the pastel and
break the line up a little. Preliminary collage pieces have potential but try allowing more
space/inactivity to inform the results. Looks a little dense in places but worth pursuing
as a process/technique.
Of the two preliminary pieces – the second is the strongest, with greater tonal contrast
and a more effective use of media. The foreground of the first is a little too hazy and
lacking definition. Slightly overworked.
The final piece has potential in terms of process and technique – however, the different
elements are getting lost because of a lack of definition and contrast. I can understand
you were wanting to retain the fluidity the materials were providing – and the sense of
transparency but this could have been emphasised with more contrast. For instance,
had you made the road much darker, with shadows, this would have allowed the
vehicles to stand out more. Compositionally, it is well balanced and the perspective is
accurate. It would be good to see you try making another piece with these materials
but try to build up a little more tonal contrast to add more depth.
There was a great deal of experimenting/testing out included in the work leading up to the final piece – the comments made were fair and encourage me to take these techniques further.
Demonstration of technical and Visual Skills, Demonstration of Creativity
Examples on blog suggest you work freely and quickly in your sketchbook. Watercolour
studies are strong. Remember to try and keep this fluidity own the more finished
I have now included a Sketchbook section to my blog and intend to use it to improve my use of sketchbooks and include them in my workflow.
Learning Logs or Blogs/Critical essays
Some improvement – good to see you looked at some of the artists I suggested and
your reflections are honest. Also good you are using the research more to inform your
own experiments. Resist adding to much biographical information and keep building on
the level of reflection.
I will include details and thoughts from my research in the learning log as a part of my workflow.
Figure – Look at Jenny Saville who creates large, fleshy oil painting of the nude – she
also does interesting studies in pencil and charcoal. Egon Schiele made beautifully
angular and haunting images. Paula Rego’s pastel drawing are worth looking at for
their sinister narrative. A dark undercurrent can also be found in the work of Ana Maria
Pacheco and Chantal Joffe.
Paula Rego, Ana Maria Pacheco and Chantal Joffe are new artists I will check out and use in Part 4
Pointers for the next assignment
Sketching the figure in motion with an energetic line will increase you confidence in
responding to the human form when you need to work on more careful studies.
Continue to develop your understanding of tone
Avoid overworking – allow areas of space to inform the results.
Make quick and slow drawings – keep looking